REVISIONS

Before we can approve your application, we need to request a few changes!

Thor's complete acceptance of the Tevinter way of life, slavery, etc., seems at odds with the canon point you're adapting in his AU history and the influence you say these events have had on his AU personality. While we definitely appreciate attempts to avoid making characters unnaturally enlightened for their backgrounds, we also want AU'd characters to comply with their canon personalities wherever possible. To that end, please revise to bring Thor's beliefs more in line with his canon personality and beliefs as of the events you've chosen to parallel here. Please also make sure to explain any major departures you're making from canon characterization in the Adaptation section.

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