REVISIONS

Before we can approve your application, we need to request a few changes!

Please revise your Strengths & Weaknesses section to provide more information about Rufus's abilities and their limitations. For example, you noted that he has things like "greater senses"-- please explain what this means he's able to do that a normal human can't.

In that section please also explain how Rufus's version of being a vampire works. Is he required/compelled to consume blood? Does it have to be human blood? Can he resist and survive without it? How often does he lose control, what triggers it, and what does that entail?

We'd also like to make sure that Rufus complies with our age rules, which require that a character be mentally and physically at least 16 and be perceived as being at least 16 in order to be appable. The goal of this rule is to make sure that characters seem enough like adults by setting standards that they can participate in the Inquisition without forcing the organization or other PCs to seem like they're irresponsibly allowing children to do dangerous work. Your app says only that he "looks like a teenager" and given the reference in your app to the character luring in pedophiles and how young your PB looks we want to make sure that the character actually physically is at least 16 (years of ageless immortality do not count) and will be written as appearing that way. If that is the case, please specify in the age section of your app and any future info pages that he appears to be 16 or older, so players looking for information on the age their characters should perceive him as have that to reference. If it is not the case, the character may not be appable, so let us know.

Please respond within 48 hours to let us know your application has been updated. (You may request an extension if necessary.) If you have any questions, let us know.